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i.

his inkblots look like dead bodies or
the diagrammes of sandcastles.


ii.

there is something painfully sterile about
the way she dreams in black and white
of rugged coastlines and breathing saltwater.

"go on," the doctor says, though she
hasn't said anything yet. she tells him
about how her one true love tastes like
mint, and he smiles and nods, nods and
smiles, pretends to note it on his clipboard.


iii

she doesn't want to be labeled
as a system error.


iv

she has always loved broken seashells
and mindless people wiped clean, like
magnetized hardware with blood pounding
through their cabled veins. she feels them
pulsing. wanting. ghosts in her machine.


v.

once she dropped her digital camera in
the ocean and watched it spark and sputter.
she dreamt of a quiet world captured in a
blurry photograph.


vi.

some days she is the broken seashell
and she holds herself to her own ear to
better hear the ocean tremble. some days
she is torn apart by sharks and machines
while bystanders on shore capture her
with waterlogged cameras.


vii.

she's afraid of dripping saltwater
on her doctor's notes.
this is not the sort of thing i normally can write about.
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Student Writer
"She dreamt of a quiet world captured in a blurry photograph."
Utterly lovely.
Sometimes going beyond what we normally write can astonish even ourselves.
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XpopsicleX Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2009
It all feels kind of like one of those novels about the future, the ones that were written in the early 1900's. Like '1984', or 'Brave New World', or 'Fahrenheit 451'. Where people are like machines and think, act, lives the same and the people who stand out are looked upon as crazy and are put in mental institutes with doctors who only medicate and pretends to listen... I love those type of books, and I love this :heart:
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sanaa-h Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
(iii) has got to be my favourite. even though, I think the entire thing was just breathtaking.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2009
'some days she is the broken seashell
and she holds herself to her own ear to
better hear the ocean tremble. some days
she is torn apart by sharks and machines
while bystanders on shore capture her
with waterlogged cameras.'

this has so much emotion. i can't get over this. amazing work :heart:
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DevinJamie Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2008
like magnetized hardware with blood pounding
through their cabled veins.


GREATgreat imagery.

she tells him about how her one true love tastes like mint
That's sweet. Makes me smile

Six reads powerfully to me.
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UKUSA Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2008
the last two stanzas are awesome.
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matty739 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
beautifully touching
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imamoratorium Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2008
sounds like a dream
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2008  Student Writer
There is so much fear and worry and pain expressed here - it would make any decent person want to reach out and offer a :hug: because it'll be o.k.
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Apoca-ritz Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2008   Writer
I'd like to see the world through your eyes, but maybe it wouldn't be so different.
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SpokenAubade Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2008
The life's in the details. I muchly like.
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QuietInsomniac Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2008
'some days she is the broken seashell
and she holds herself to her own ear to
better hear the ocean tremble.'

i am this sometimes.
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Spamuel Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2008   Writer
It's hard to use electronics in poetry, I respect how well this has been done! :)
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cheeeeep Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2008
The continuity of the sea in this work is great; beautiful. :)
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RobinClone Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2008   Traditional Artist
I really am at a loss of words to describe how much I like this piece. Just...good job. :rose:
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PoetaTriste Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2008
it's these inner things the world can't understand
nor explain in the programming.

...beautiful "insanity" takes over, and disputes, our day to day machines.

error messages abound-
and we some how need it that way...

you're quite amazing kiddo. ;)
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bloodyteardrop08 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2008
Stunning. I don't think I can describe how this makes me feel really. :+favlove:
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:iconenoughsoap:
enoughsoap Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2008
This feels strange but at the same time familiar. ;)
Thanks for sharing once again.

:+favlove:
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cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2008
I love this.

especially the line "ghosts in her machine."
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